Talk:Fate and Freedom I: Life Among the Ashes/@comment-5020152-20120809173716

Several things I found messed up here. Not just the spelling/grammar, but the story itself.

First of all, NARGACUGA for dinner?! You do realize that the flesh of a carnivore is much higher in protein than that of an herbivore? So high, in fact, that it can be dangerous. I mean, I know they have to eat, but still... (Speaking of which, I hunted my first Nargacuga today, and beat her on the first try!)

Second of all... "He had been dreaming of a world better than this, no empire, no tyranny and no oppression, and having children with his girlfriend..." Doesn't every guy dream of that?

Nice story so far, but not as good as the other two. No offense.