Talk:Cursed Hunter Chronicles lll Twin winds of the Tundra/@comment-5028662-20121128162640

I've looked this over briefly, and could I perhaps be your personal...lackey, if you will? There aren't too many typos, but there are some other mistakes such as missing capital letters, missing commas or missing full stops.

Also, do you want it written in Standar English or colloquial language (I ask since it's in first person).

Thirdly, you lack commas. Often in sentences there is no comma where there should be one.

Lastly, you should try and use connectives ro commas a little more; almost the entire first paragraph is a block of "I... I... I...". It reduces the fluidity of the read.

Not everyone can just go and slap a perfect page of fiction on the table; look at mine for example- I daresay it's brilliant, but the amount typos in the text is immusurable. But really, keep it looking as "pro" as possible.

On a lighter note, it's great! :)