Talk:Fanfic:Dex/@comment-10890875-20130711203011

great idea but the grammar needs a desperate look at.

" Dex took the axe with gratitude, he gave the small blacksmith a handshake and I travelled back through the archway back into the raging sandstorm "

'HE gave' and 'I travelled' in the same sentence about the SAME person? 3rd person switched to 1st person in an instance?

Please fix.